Wednesday, January 20, 2010

Punishment Fit The Crime - 3WW Post

“...and then I kicked him once more to the head for good measure.”

Jimmy looked up at his older brother in awe and asked, for the third time, for him to tell the ending again.

“I reached down and grabbed him by his now-bloodied hair and wrenched his head back. I could see him teetering on the edge of consciousness but I wanted him to know just how much he had pissed me off. I cocked my arm, ready to finish him off, when I felt a rough hand on the back of my neck haul me off the bastard. I rolled over and saw a fucking copper standing there with a smug look on his face.”

“Then what happened, Billy, then what happened?” Jimmy asked.

“Well, then the damned copper pulled me to my feet and told me that he knew the ideal place for people like me.”

A bell chimed in the background and Jimmy slowly rose from his chair. He looked at his brother once more.

“See you next Thursday, Billy.”

17 comments:

Andy Sewina said...

Streuth! How long did he get?

Cool blog title too... (just buttering you up!)

ThomG said...

Very well told tale and a great ending.

David Barber said...

Nicely told story, Paul. Cracker!

Laurita said...

I guess the moral to Billy's story is painfully obvious. Nice, concise write, Paul.

Sweetest in the Gale said...

Very well done...I love your blog title. :~)

Jay Thurston said...

Great way to leave it as a cliffhanger! I enjoyed this, well done!

illyriataylor said...

Paul, I had it there for a minute and now it's completely gone...along with my sanity. I'll try this again Friday.

Harry said...

Ha! Good job Paul! Great ending!

Jeeves said...

Thats an interesting ending

Tumblewords: said...

That IS a good place for him. :) Good story.

Larry said...

tsk tsk such a rough ass I think maybe the guy should get his ass kicked for beinfg so tough. I'm posted also.but its not roudy like yours.


manic Monday

Stan Ski said...

Next Thursday's visit might last a bit longer, the way he responded to the story...

Americanising Desi said...

A GREAT EXPRESSION :D

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JulieJordanScott said...

My younger siblings never look at me with such adoration. Where did I go wrong?

Just someone said...

Didn't expect the ending :)

Dee Martin said...

great blog title and not at all fattening! Loved this smart ass tough guy but I hope at some point he makes it clear to younger brother that this is not a path he wants to follow!

Scott Clawson said...

Awesome! Good job with the words! "See you next Thursday" :-)